AGI Workshop - Day 10

By Ben Mansur

Feedback for me:

Change angle of the mousetrap to add depth
Humans hanging on butcher hooks
Book with Jeremy for structure
Don’t do holocaust, too dark
Look at what’s interrupting the flow
Lobster claw doesn’t read well yet
Hardest part of vignette is creating structure due to lack of linearity
I have a good awareness of what is and isn’t working
Some are still obvious, the snappy unexpected vignettes are working better. Shots like fox could then be cut to one shot and build momentum
Animal testing could be spraying perfume at human or dropping liquid/shampoo on human
Horses & safari hunters still need work
Sheep shearing not reading well yet
Puppies was great
Could cut time by a third

By Ben Mansur
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Published On: 06/07/2019